It is not necessary that that violence always has negative effects, it can result in positive ones too. Violence is always predicted as negative behaviour with intention to hurt someone. Aggressive behaviour is not always negative.
In real life situations, aggressive behaviour happens really frequently and is often justified. In some situations its unfortunately necessary. These situations include self defence when someone is threatening or robbing you, you could do something about it like using pepper spray to atleast get away from situations.
Now with normal people aside, the policemen and soldiers are keepers of peace who bring peace with violence when it is necessary. It concludes that violence is only justified when there is self defence. In wars too, people might think that "why do they kill each other?", its because it a kill or be killed situation but killing normal people/ civilians is considered terrorism as they don't have any part in the war. Unnecessary violence has negative effects but at right times it can be used to maintain peace too.
Your message was clear and easy to understand. I always knew what your opinion was on the subject. I wish you would have used more example than "whens" and "what ifs". It would have really driven home your message of violence having positive effects if you had used concrete examples. I loved your ending sentence because it summed everything up and left the reading satisfied. Good job!
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ReplyDeleteI thought your essay was very straight forward and your points were very easy to understand. However, my wish is that if you used more examples to support those ideas, it would make your essay more powerful. I liked how you compared positive and negative effects of violence a the end there.